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Without You
Loneliness,
consumes my soul.
Emptiness & darkness,
consume the carcass.
Not even,
a hollow shell,
remains.
Without You.
Without Your Love,
in my Life.
© 02JAN2010 James Elron Mings
With You
Overabundance,
floods my soul!
Wholeness & Light,
overwhelm my being!
Lavish Life,
Love overflows,
blissful!
With You!
With Your Love,
in my Life!
© 03JAN2010 James Elron Mings
Loneliness,
consumes my soul.
Emptiness & darkness,
consume the carcass.
Not even,
a hollow shell,
remains.
Without You.
Without Your Love,
in my Life.
© 02JAN2010 James Elron Mings
With You
Overabundance,
floods my soul!
Wholeness & Light,
overwhelm my being!
Lavish Life,
Love overflows,
blissful!
With You!
With Your Love,
in my Life!
© 03JAN2010 James Elron Mings
Literature
Clouds
When you walk to here and there,
Out in the streets or anywhere,
Look up to the skies in wondrous stare,
The clouds are asking for a thought to spare,
Do you realise now?
How the winds bring change,
And how we dream of better ways?
Go challenge the world you live in,
And broaden the mind you wander in,
Lost in the madness of a cloud,
Lost in a world of your own.
Literature
Love Song
Unspoken words between us
And the silence floating over my head
Weighs so much / I cannot bear
The solitude in which I sent my little friend
So
Call me Wretched and I say it serves me right
As I
Have always put you on a side, as you
Have never been in Love′s good graces
. . . . .
Sunk
Into oblivion my soul has
No longer will to express itself
Awoken
In the dead of night my eyes were
Not able to see the light
And, in short, I got afraid / when I leave your heart
Will you be so
Literature
Do Not Forget
Burning bright,
Like a fire's light.
The sun appears,
The moon whispers tears.
I raise my eyes,
And forget my lies.
The sun knows all,
I've no way to stall,
This law before,
I wait no more.
Heaven's judge awaits,
I must face my fates.
For in this hour,
I cannot cower.
Forgive my lies,
I apologize.
Forgive my sins.
I am done here,
I face the fear.
For my own hands,
they write new lands.
In my own mind,
I cannot find,
What I believe,
Now many grieve.
I say farewell,
I here have fell.
Into the wind,
I can't rescind.
My arms are spread,
My days are dead.
Good-bye my friend,
This is the end.
A new day will come,
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Two separate Poems, but a single message, Yin/Yang, one incomplete, without the other...
I felt in writing these that it was important to "combine" their posting, as they share the same page in my Journal as well. They are not only a contrast, but a pair that were (at the same time) inspired by more than one source!
Have you felt this way before? Do you feel it could be said more clearly? Would you shorten/lengthen it/them? What do you think of listing the two together, as opposed to individually? Is there too much / not enough imagery?
I felt in writing these that it was important to "combine" their posting, as they share the same page in my Journal as well. They are not only a contrast, but a pair that were (at the same time) inspired by more than one source!
Have you felt this way before? Do you feel it could be said more clearly? Would you shorten/lengthen it/them? What do you think of listing the two together, as opposed to individually? Is there too much / not enough imagery?
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Well, I agree on putting the two pieces together... however, the line in which you put the date and your name really seems to break the feeling you get after the first poem. I would consider taking that away...
And, putting the titles in bold or italic font would help understanding that you're passing on to a different part of the poem itself.
As for the imagery, I don't think there is a lot of it, but the little that I see it's effective.
